HeartOfTheStorm's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Vampire Pixel in the Neon City]

Great art/animation but a ton of the action lacked clarity.
1. When viking grabbed the ghost thing it was hard to register because his fist was out of frame (keep important actions onscreen).
2. The ghost thrown through the window was impossible to understand. It becomes instantly far away (it NEEDS a smear if going super fast) and there's a building where it used to be so it looked like it turned into a building or something
3. The cut to viare running was also impossible to register that she was running up a building, it needed either a transition or a camera angle from her side. That one frame of ghost at the beginning of the cut made no sense too, there's no way to know which direction the ghost was moving

I actually prefer rushed pacing during action sequences but in this case it was over the line and I couldn't follow.
Also the personalities were pretty weak. Good characters have glaring personality strengths and weaknesses visible at all times. E.g. the tf2 scout is hasty, proud, mischievous, and annoying (to other characters, not the viewer).

[Brush Your Teeth, Kids!]

Now THIS is how you write a show. Lovable pace, narrative-focused, and genuinely funny

[Puppet Grumps: 9 Ball Island]

Nice quality props and set. the puppets have very little expression though. None of the body/arm/mouth movements looked energetic or unique. Also game-grumps do-overs are overdone and almost never funny (especially with lifeless puppets).

[Monster Short]

Did you even think this was funny when you thought of it? The pacing was also savagely bad; this whole video could've been compressed into 10 seconds and still feel slow.

[Just Another Day In Australia]

Serviceable pacing and art. Lots of little things prevented the art from being good. E.g. the stupid red tumblr nose when it's not even cold out and the jellyfish line thickness was different than man line thickness so it looked far away.
The expressions, sound effects, and music were great. Neither the story nor the twist were remotely interesting.

MeatBallDemon responds:

Thank you for the thought out response. I'll be sure to up the quality of my next cartoons.

[Undertale: Final Breath (fan Animation)]

Speak past the mic; make sure it's not right in front of you or else you get that awful popping noise. Pop filters also work if you want to speak directly at the mic

[An Average Encounter (Pokemon)]

One joke on repeat... and it's a joke that appears in every single pokemon parody.
Good voiceacting, the animation was pretty good but the art was pretty bad.

[BLISS (Part 2)]

Slow as watching dirt grow, so many unnecessary moments and scenes. Some of the shots were decent but most of them were super uniformely spaced and at the same claustrophobic zoom so the movie felt like super repetitive mush at some points. Zooming THAT far into the face is used rarely - and almost exclusively to make major emotional moments stand out. You used a super close camera constantly and it became ineffective.

So vary up your cut spacing, don't cut so fast (it's a sign of poor action), keep track of how zoomed in each scene is to watch for repetition, zoom the heck out to establish spacial relationships, and don't plan for meaningless time-consuming moments.

Those all could have been detected in the storyboard or animatic; you should go through as many pro films as you can, pick random scenes and storyboard them. Memorize the subtleties (zoom, timing, camera movement, frame offset in relation to which way a character is looking, how much new visual/auditory info is in each scene) and stand on the shoulders of giants.

[Arc Infinitum 2]

Wow quite an improvement. I remember bashing the first one a while ago but this one seems to have a ton of effort put into the animation, audio balance, angles, and pacing. It's not flawless but I don't expect flawless.

Not sure if I'm supposed to understand the overall story yet it's still minutes of dialogue worth of names and events which nobody could keep up with without pen and paper.

Also I noticed you just placed you characters wherever on the screen, but there are actually some placement rules you should check out:
http://www.floobynooby.com/IPUB/axislines.png
http://www.floobynooby.com/IPUB/storyboarding08.jpg
http://www.floobynooby.com/IPUB/storyboarding10.jpg