HeartOfTheStorm's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[SSMM Demake Game Pitch]

"if I can hire any programmer"
Just do it yourself, this type of game is the fastest and easiest possible. Just pick any language, (Flash is easy if you have it) then look up "make a shooter [your language here]" online.

If you have Flash CS3+ I can dump some code on you and you'll be in the fast-lane.

Trying to collaborate with random programmers is a big hassle, as I'm sure you know.

ScepterDPinoy responds:

I was wondering what programs are easier to make games for the internet with. Should I go with Stencyl?

[Aries Sky 26]

Good pacing and view progression. One thing you may want to avoid is the super thick black borders, which are typically used only for flashbacks e.g. http://mangafox.me/manga/iris_zero/v02/c005/13.html

Kel-chan responds:

thanks for the tip

[Aries Sky 30]

Great page, lotsa room, very clear environment, consistent lines and all that. Keep it up!

[Aries Sky pg 8-9]

This re-upload is a definite improvement, hopefully my last words weren't too harsh. However, there are still some inconsistencies (the bottom-left panel is still a bit horizontally squashed, the middle panel's guy face is horizontally squashed (compare it to the top-left panel), the middle guy's lines are much thicker than the top left panel even though they are the same distance from the viewer, and when you enlarge the pic some of the panels are really smooth while others are pixelly. Overall it does the job though and the inconsistencies don't make it harder to read anymore, but just keep them in mind when you work on new pages.

Kel-chan responds:

yeah thanks I'm learning as I go along

[Disco shank]

dat focus. dem highlights. dos colours.
He also has a rather sad expression for a goblin bent on killing.

[Iron Woman]

Cool highlights and shading. Doesn't it look like her thumb is on the wrong side of her left (the one to your right) hand?

bocodamondo responds:

oh fuck. how didnt i noticed that....i cant fix it now because everytime i got to an artwork edit page it crashes...

[Metatron's Cube Upright]

Not shabby

I've done some of this "draw some lines inside a polygon stuff" in flash, and overall this is unimpressive. I'd say I could make this in half an hour, or five mins if I had a goal in mind. If you use flash I'd recommend drawing all these lines and stuff, then delete some in a pattern and make a cyclical thought-provoking arrangement, instead of just dragging between points. One super cool thing about flash is the "transform" box (ctrl-t), you can take stuff, set the degrees (divide 360 by 5 to get five rotations, etc) then press the copy button in the bottom right of the window. You can make symmetrical gears (see my second art thing to see what I mean), whirlpools, pinwheels, anything your heart desires. Go forth and be boss.

smirkstudios responds:

You seem to think I was trying to impress you by uploading this image. I'm glad you stopped to take the time to give me what you also seem to think are tips.

I will take a stab at a harder drawing when I've mastered the purely magical aspects of the Flower of Life. I am also familiar with your methods of "gear" making, and I am happy to report that I will make use of your criticism to better my work.

Thanks for your input. Thanks also for the good score! I'm aware this drawing is not hard, that's not why I posted it. Also, just cause you can draw doesn't mean people are going to know that you're helping when you tell them you are not impressed with them. I can tell, but others probably can't/wont.

[Clover]

:o Hair! eyes! SHADING!

I love the deepness of her eye, the definition of her hair (It's complicated and the form isn't lost with the complex shading) and the shading! The shading is so nice, it's sorta monochromatic, and very unified! The shirt detail is neat, really adds to it, and you have a professional lack of detail in her face and hand ( that's a good thing if you're confused by what I mean). Recommendations? The hand is on the small side, I don't mind the thinness of the index finger, that's your style I suppose, but if you're going for close-to-realistic proportions, your outstretched hand should be as big as your face. Ok maybe not on girls, but grab your face right now and look in a mirror. One more recommendation, clover leaves instead of flower petals? Anyway, thankyou, you have a beautiful heart :)

[The Hoard Part 45]

:OOOOO

:O what's gonna happen? I can't breathe until you make the next one! The suspense! Will the prince ever accept her after many more trials together?! Will I ever find the Waldo hidden in every one of your comics?!

[The Hoard Part 40]

hmmm..

I'll try and help you with your action on this one, purely as a critic. Since this is an action scene, the viewer shouldn't care about the background much. First panel is the best, particles are great, as well as the limp form, but the tail that's smacking the baddy doesn't look like it's in much motion.

For every other panel, experiment with abstract backgrounds. Panel 2 could use either erratic lines or radiating lines to emphasize the roar, panel 3 would look good with some parallel lines of varying thicknesses to show speed, for panel 6 and 7 I'd get some parallel lines and cut them off at the horizon, and make more exagerated impacts throughout. Panel 8 is strong, but it'd be pwerful if the baddy was wincing and his hair was blowing back. ETC. Read some manga or superhero comix to get an idea of what I'm talking about.